Wednesday, June 13, 2012
Mary Features of a narrative 2
Story 2
One day there was a little girl named Karen who lived with her great great grandma, they lived in a secret place where nobody has been there before. A day later, Karen went to pick some fruit for her grandma.
She went to pick some fruits in the fruit garden but then suddenly she heard a noise, she said ‘who is it’ no one answered so she ran back home and she knew someone was following her then she ran even faster and faster then she got home and ran inside. She locked the door and said “Grandma” but she wasn't there, so Karen went to look in the closet she wasn’t there.....
Then she ran outside and said “grandma are you there” there was the big bad gorilla and then he grabbed Karen and said “got you now” then she called for help “HELP HELP” then her grandma came out of the garage with an axe and said “ WELL WELL WELL WHAT DO WE GOT RIGHT HERE''.
‘’Let go of her’’ grandma said all I will kill you then the bad gorilla said “no way’’ then grandma said “come on then let's fight” then 5 hits on the cheat he was dead than Karen fell on the ground and said grandma I was looking for you. Then grandma said that she was in the garage looking at old things and I heard you stream.
.......THEN THEY LIVED HAPPILY EVER AFTER.........
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Hi Mary,
ReplyDeleteyou have wrote about a lot of things keep up the great work and don't forget to go back and recheck your writing so that it makes sense keep up the great work.And I can't wait to hear more about your story's again.
Hi Mary,
ReplyDeleteyou have done a great job keep up the great work Mary.You need to go back a recheck that you are really making sense because you rush your story.You need to make sure you check your spelling because they dont sound right.